My topic is sleep deprivation in teenagers. I spoke on what is sleep deprivation, what are the effects, and how to solve it.
My first essay was a definition essay. I defined sleep deprivation and spoke on the overwhelming amount of teens who are sleep deprived. I also spoke on the reasons why teenagers were so sleep deprived. I decided to write about this topic because not many people are informed about the importance of sleep. What also inspired me to write on this topic is just last year I was a senior in high school who like most others, was extremely sleep deprived and completely oblivious to the dangers I was putting my self in. For my second essay I talked about the negative effects that come with sleep deprivation. My essay was a causal essay. I named the negative effects that lack of sleep can have on a teenager. Physical and mental health, along with academic performance were my three main points. I did a lot of research for this essay and used several statistics to get my point across. My third essay was a proposal. I proposed a solution to end sleep deprivation. My idea was to delay school starting times to later in the day. This essay I definitely had the most trouble on.
My Research Methods
Fortunately, the first website I clicked on gave me almost everything I needed to know about sleep deprivation. I relied heavily on research for my three essays. National Sleep Foundation was where I found most of my research. I found all oF my research before I started to write my essay. I felt as if I was informed and was educated on the subject it would be much easier for me to write. I felt that me doing research before writing allowed me to put my own personal spin on the essays. Some of my research was not data or studies, but it was high schoolers, teachers who all have faced/seen sleep deprivation first hand everyday speaking on the topic.
Writing this essays definitely changed my life. I never realized that sleep affected me so much. My first semester here I was only getting 5 or 6 hours of sleep a night. After realizing how unhealthy that was, I make sure I get the necessary 8 hours a night. Sometimes I wish I had not researched this topic, as no matter what I have to get my 8 hours knowing what could happen if i don’t. I hope that one day everyone will be knowledgeable on the effects of sleep deprivation, and high schools around the country will compensate so teenagers can get the necessary 8 hours.
My proposal paper will cover the solutions to getting enough sleep. In my first essay I covered why teenagers are not sleeping. Then in my second essay I discussed the possible dangers of not sleeping. I will most likely be referring to my first essay, naming the reasons why teens are not sleeping and trying to give an answer to them. I definitely want to have my own original spin on my essay, and use some personal experience as I was a teenager in high school not that long ago.
I have many ideas that I will explore. My strongest argument will be the fight to change school starting times. I feel that starting schools later in the day will have a huge impact on sleep. My sophomore year my school extended the school day by 30 minutes, starting it at 7;30 am instead of 8. I believe this was arbitrary, as the 30 minutes taken out of my day took 30 minutes away from my sleep, and 30 minutes away from my day. Looking at it closer, the 30 minute extension would only added 5 minutes of more class time, and the last 5 minutes spent of class is usually not spent productively. Other arguments I plan on speaking on are parents, technology, and informing teenagers of the importance of sleep.
My main point in my second essay is that sleep deprivation is not taken seriously, and sleep is not a priority in most teens. Unfortunately, I could not find any visual arguments about sleep, or at least any that pertain to my topic, so I decided to create one my self. I see my self as a awful artist, however I believe my message gets out strong in my visual. I created a comic strip, found on the last page of a newspaper. The story is a boy who is up late watching TV while his brother has gone to sleep. The brother comes down later at 3 in the morning to find him still up watching pointless television. The brother insists that he should get some sleep, but he reassures him that he will “sleep when he is dead”. The next morning the brother is dead, and on his grave stone, it writes “He finally got some sleep”. My main point is to tell teens that sleep is important, and just like food or water, without sufficient enough sleep, you can die. My main audience is teenagers, so something like a comic strip would catch their attention better than anything else.
When writing essays, I find that its hardest for me to start and finish my essay. I write my body paragraphs first, instead of getting stuck on the introduction. Most of my body is ready to be submitted, but i am still working on getting my thesis into my introduction. I really like that my topic is unique. I also like that I have a lot of research, and I am able to back up my points, and take the research and put it into a different perspective. I do not like my introduction. I find myself repeating my first essay, and cant find another way to start my essay. I basically am doing the same writing process as my first essay, except my introduction was written first.
My peer also liked how unique my topic was, and how it applied to him. He ensured that all my points were backed up, and how I took research and put it in my own words, so he can understand as someone who is uninformed about sleep deprivation. He did suggest that my introduction was very important, and even though my body paragraphs are good, the introduction can hurt my essay. Overall it was very helpful. My peer did not finish much of his essay. However, I was intrigued about his topic. It also gave me an idea on how to start my introduction.
When writing my first essay, I had made the mistake of veering off my essay guidelines. Fortunately for me, I was able to split my first essay basically in half, and start my second essay with the same idea. I plan on doing the causal argument for my essay. I am going to write about the risks of sleep deprivation and how it can negatively affect teenagers health physically, mentally, and can hinder them academically. Because I had written the main points in my first draft of the first paper, I have already done the necessary research for my essay. I believe that sleep deprivation should be much more of a priority for people to fix. Numerous studies have recently came out warning us about the dangers of lack of sleep, but they seemed to be overlooked and sleep is now considered a royalty, not a necessity. I plan on trying to bring the dangerous health effects lack of sleep can cause to light so we can end sleep deprivation in the near future.
NSF. “Teens and Sleep.” National Sleep Foundation. National Sleep Foundation, 5 Jan. 2014. Web. 06 Mar. 2017.
The National Sleep Foundation is the place to go for research on sleep. The website gives the real facts of sleep, how much teenagers need vs how much they are getting. The website goes into detail of the short term and long term affects of sleep deprivation, and provides solutions to help counteract sleep deprivation. This was definitely where I found most of my research. I used the solid facts given here and was able to put my own spin on sleep deprivation. I became more knowledgable through reading this website and this helped in writing my essay.
AAP. “Let Them Sleep: AAP Recommends Delaying Start Times of Middle and High Schools to Combat Teen Sleep Deprivation.” Let Them Sleep. American Academy of Pediatrics, 25 Aug. 2014. Web. 06 Mar. 2017.
This website differs from the first one. The first one gave only facts. The second one was about school starting times. They used real world examples of high schools around the country who had changed their school starting times.This was helpful because one of my main focuses was school starting times and how they hinder sleep at night. I was able to tell the story of schools who have implemented the later start times and how it has proved to be beneficial. The website is very reliable.
I feel that composing the annotated bibliography was very beneficial. It helps me review my sources to see if they are credible, and how I can use these resources to my benefit while writing my essay. I am able to extract the main ideas of all my websites and see if I utilized all the materials given to me by the resource in my essay. It also helps me to see if i used these resources correctly, understanding the main points of the resources. The only hindrance I saw is that it takes a while to cite all my sources and write a paragraph describing them. Overall I feel that writing my annotated bibliography was more helpful than hurtful.
Two articles I read during my research for my topic were Sleep for Teenagers, and Sleep Deprivation in Teens. Obviously both articles are focused on the lack of sleep in teenagers, but they both are centered are different aspects of sleep deprivation. The first article, Sleep for Teenagers, appeals to facts. The author mainly writes on the cold hard facts about sleep, the recommended amount of sufficient sleep, the low percentage of teenagers who actually get this recommended amount of sleep, and the negative consequences that insufficient sleep can cause. The author also provides solutions to how we can help teenagers gain the sufficient sleep they need to reach their potential as a student and as a person. The author writes his article with no bias, simply to inform those about the dangerous and alarming statistics on sleep in teens. I believe that this article was very informative about many facts about sleep deprivation that are unknown to most of the public.
Although the second article also focuses on lack of sleep, the authors main idea differs from the first article. Sleep Deprivation in Teens centers only on the reasons why teenagers are not getting enough sleep. The problem with the second article is that it uses almost no factual evidence. The article starts out with the author telling a story about her 16 year old daughter who is very busy and does not get sufficient sleep. Then the author goes on to list the reasons why teenagers aren’t getting sleep, like over scheduling, biological makeup, technology, and earlier school start times. The author uses no facts, but just personal experiences that students have had with each reason named. Although i agree with the reasons, there is no support other than one other students personal experience. The first article provided with factual evidence, which the second article lacks. The author of the second article makes a claim that students are not sleeping because of over scheduling, and uses support through a 16 year old student who has too much work on her hands for her to complete all of her commitments while getting the recommended amount of sleep. Taking one student does not represent the entire population.